Here are some alterations in the previous poem in the poetic form- The Bop, that I did write. Many of the lines are the same- there are only a few changes which show a new story, which is different from the earlier one.
The floor hasn’t been cleaned since a while
The floor hasn’t been cleaned
since a while, one can see
the specks of dirt, the fallen
spider webs here and there spread
like the dried flowers of love
on an old withered tomb.
The faded love does leave a stain.
A foul smell is also coming up
from something on the floor
may be that thing has died
now decaying on this floor
which hasn’t been cleaned since a while
and don’t oversee the broken shards of
glass and the dark red stain
which has by now left its permanent mark.
The faded love does leave a stain.
The sick lady of the house rose
from her bed finally and saw
the floor which hasn’t been
cleaned since a while, and aims
at cleaning it up in a while but
ends up lying back on her tomb within a while.

October 16, 2012 at 12:50 pm
I really like this version alot! Nice..Very Nice!
October 16, 2012 at 1:15 pm
Thank You!